Grade my ( Rather sucky ) essay

Xylem101
Sat, 15 Jul 2006 18:08:14 +0000

Can somebody please grade my SUCKY essay…just say straight up what it deseves… i know for sure that its not gonna get more then an 8 (probably not even a 6) …but like no flaming this is my first essay and i rather suck at writing essays…
This was the question
*Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.

We often hear that we can learn much about someone or something just by casual observation. We are not required to look beneath the surface or to question how something seems. In fact, we are urged to trust our impressions, often our first impressions, of how a person or a situation seems to be. Yet appearances can be misleading. What “seems” isn’t always what is.

Is the way something seems to be not always the same as it actually is? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.
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and theres my essay

What “Seems” isnt always what is, that is a statement that needs to be implemented in our present day world, as most people usually put into mind that “What Seems IS What IS”.

The concept of “First Impression” is quite a wrong one indeed, as you might encounter a person at a moment of anger, Perhaps even his FIRST ever moment of anger, then you ‘assume’ that the person is an angry, agressive person, even though he might be a calm,peaceful person but how would YOU know, you never saw him any other time, you just met him, and jumped to assumptions, why is that? its because you think that first impression is THE Impression.

First impressions arent only limited to small situations like the one mentioned above, in fact, the first impression of King Andrew G. Phlips Was one of the main factors that caused him to lose the war, when he asked for a “Calm, Self controled man” to lead his armyies into a battle (that would require great self-control) people told him about a certain man - Johnson J.- and about how calm he is, Andrew was quite impressed when he first heard about the man.
The enemy king heard about this from one of his spys and decided to act fast before the man could become leader of the armies, he told his spy to make the man look bad infront of King Philip, the spy had an idea.
The Spy went to King Philip (the spy was one of Philp’s men that had betrayed him but Philip didnt know) and told him that the man had a very short temper and wasnt quite self controled and that what he heard was rumors.
Then the spy went and attempted aggrevate the Man for a LONG time, the man didnt get angry for a while, then finally when the man was talking with the king, the spy atemmpted one last time, and then the man finally got angry and punched the spy, the king saw this and he assumed that the man really WAS an angry person-not knowing what he had went through- so he didnt give him the position, then when the enemy king heard of this he told the Man to come and command his armies, the man decided to do it , and he really did prove to be one of the most self controled generals that he won the war against his Ex-King, King Philip.

After Reading all of that us humans should know better then to jump to assumptions and we should always meticulously investigate a person before attempting to find out his personality.

do u guys think that the king philip example sort of sucks…or rather it DOES suck…should i cut it out for sometihng else?