Grade my ( Rather sucky ) essay

CC_Admin
Sat, 15 Jul 2006 18:29:33 +0000

What “seems” isn’t always what is–that is a statement that needs to be implemented in our present day world, as most people usually put into mind that “What seems is what is”.

The concept of “First Impression” is quite a wrong one indeed, as you might encounter a person at a moment of anger–perhaps even his first ever moment of anger–and assume that the person is an angry, aggressive person, even though he might be a calm, peaceful person. But how logical is it to suddenly jump to an abrupt assumption when you’ve never seen him at any other time? You mistakenly think that first impression is the impression–the entire essence of a person.

First impressions aren’t only limited to small situations like the one mentioned above. In fact, the first impression of King Andrew G. Philips was one of the main factors that caused him to lose the war. When he asked for a “calm, self-controlled man” to lead his armies into battle which required great self-control, people told him about a certain man - Johnson J.- and about how calm he was. Andrew was quite impressed when he first heard about the man.
The enemy king heard about this from one of his spies and decided to act fast before the man could become the leader of the armies. He told his spy to make the man look bad infront of King Philip, and the spy had an idea.
The spy went to King Philip and told him that what he heard were merely rumors–the man had a very short temper and wasn’t quite self-controlled.
Then the spy went and attempted aggravate the man for a long time. The man didn’t get angry for awhile, and the spy waited until the man spoke with the king. The spy atemmpted one last time, and then the man finally got angry and punched the spy. When the king saw this he assumed that the man really was an angry person-not knowing what he had went through- so he didn’t give him the position. Thereafter, the enemy king heard of this and he told the man to come and command his armies. The man decided to do it and he really did prove to be one of the most self-controlled generals. He was so adept that he won the war against his Ex-King, King Philip.

After reading all of that us humans should know better than to jump to assumptions. We should always meticulously investigate a person before attempting to find out his personality.

***I edited some of it. It had lots of grammatical errors. I think you should work on rephrasing your sentences and grammar. But I like the idea–kudos for that. :)