Grade My SAT Essay (1-6)

Sixteh
Sun, 18 Apr 2010 14:16:42 +0000

You have a number of awkward sentences, your examples are about as boring as they could possibly get (i.e. they don’t demonstrate a whole lot of critical thinking), your word choice is frequently redundant, and your topic sentences are extremely weak.


The sample essay’s examples have two takes on the thesis: it shows how without technology, ancient societies could still flourish as well as how with technology, society has a number of new problems. Yours only examines one of those.