Grade My SAT Essay (1-6)

Yamster
Sun, 18 Apr 2010 14:55:09 +0000

Sixteh:

My examples have two takes on the thesis as well. I stated that without automobiles people could walk to places, but it would take longer, and with automobiles we have pollution and car accidents. For fast food restaurants I stated that our ancestors, without fast food/technology, hunted and gathered food, getting exercise and healthy food, while with fast food restaurants people are consuming junk food.

Also, you say my topic sentences are weak, but look at the sample’s:

“Consider, if you will, ancient Greecian Society”
“Now let us examine some men from our time.”