Help with Appealing Academic Dismissal

KMstar1
Sat, 02 Jan 2016 07:41:33 +0000

I have edited the 2nd and 3rd paragraph. Is this edit better than the other one?
Dear xxxxxxxx,
My name is xxxxxx, a sophomore student who has been dismissed after the fall semester of 2015. When I was notified that I had become dropped as a student, I knew I had no one to blame but myself. Although my reasons were not due to any physical reasons, I urge you to give me one more chance to prove myself as the diligent student I know I can be.
During my freshman year and first semester of my sophomore year, the main reason for my failure in class was not attending lectures and discussions. I was naïve and arrogant. I had thought passing exams was so important that it would outweigh everything else. For example, in general education classes such as Intro to Psychology and Intro to Sociology suffered by dropping from an A grade to a C grade because of my lackluster effort in attendance.
My academic dismissal has allowed me to think about why I want to stay to stay in school and why I want to succeed. I thought about what I really want to do in the future and have realized that I have a strong passion to help those who are sick due to lack of medication. My goals is to study biology and fully prepare myself to pursue pharmacy once I graduate from this University.
It would mean everything to graduate from this university because I have grown to love this university. I know I have the study skills to achieve good grades in college. I also know that due to my academic set back, there are many steps I need to take in order to achieve my goal. If I am readmitted to this university, I will follow through with the plan of retaking English and physics in the spring semester. I will do whatever it takes to receive a B or higher in all of my classes. By doing so, my accumulated GPA will be higher than a 2.0.
I will ensure these grades by visiting the walk in tutor hours my university provides in English, Mathematics, and Physics. I will also list my name in the free tutoring sessions in Mathematics and Physics offered by the university numerous times a week in order to fully understand the concepts taught in lecture. I will also be on task of every assignment by organizing myself and listing everything on a google calendar. I will attend every lecture and discussion with the intent and determination to learn regardless of any excuse. Finally, I will visit my professors and my academic advisor frequently to always know how I am currently standing in terms of my grade. I hope you can take this into consideration and allow me to continue my education at xxxxxx.
Sincerely,
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