Help with my change over time essay?

90bluestars
Sun, 20 Nov 2011 13:53:38 +0000

I really need some help with my ap world history change over time eassy, this is my first change over time essay, and our teacher doesnt really give up any guides to help us write them. I feel like i real need some structural guidelines and help with my word choice, and my analysis.

This is just my thesis paragraph and my first paragraph, i need help before i write my second.

Prompt:Discuss the changes and continuities in economic and cultural developments in china and western Europe during the post classical age.

rubric:
Has acceptable thesis (1)

Addresses all parts of the question, but not necessarily evenly or throughout. (2)
addresses most parts of the questions(+1)

Substances thesis with appropriate historical evidence (2)
partially substantiates thesis with appropriator historical evidence (+1)

uses relevant world historical constant at least twice to explain change and continuity over time (1)

analysis at least twice the process of continuity and change over time (1)

During the Post-classical age,western Europe and china went though economic and cultural change and continuity. in western Europe, there were more changes than continuity.Economically, through agriculture and trade development and advancement. Culturally, though religion, intellectual and education development and advancement.China also had more change than continuity economically by agriculture and trade advancement. culturally by religion and intellectual advancement. (i feel like this is too long and not structured correctly, it doesnt flow…)

Before 1000, western europe was economically and culturally behind. soon after their economy boomed with advancements of agriculture. they developed a three field system and a collar for the oxen. with this, population was able to increase. they also developed long distance trade thought a Mediterranean trade route. even with these major economic changes there were some agricultural continuity. western europe still relied on the peasants to word the land. trade had not yet developed before 1000, but they still struggled to develop it even with the attacks of the huns. Culturally, western Europe changed intellectually and religiously. intellectuality, they became more advanced, inventing banking, and textiles. religiously, the church began to lose their politically power and began to influence architecture, thus developing gothic cathedrals. cultural, some aspects stayed the same. education was important in western europe, even though before they just recopied manuscripts, soon they were able to build learning centers around cathedrals, religiously, Christianity stayed important in the society, still placing saints as an important leader in the civilization. This is important because these quick major advancements gave the civilization a since of identity after being divided from eastern europe and staying in chaotic ruin for so long.

Please help me fix my mistakes!!!