How bad did I screw up my essay?

NickSaban
Sat, 05 Oct 2013 20:55:09 +0000

All right I’m really worried. So here’s a summary of my essay…

Basic into bla bla bla pretty generic stuff while not totally formulaic…

1st example:
A basketball player from Miami is exceptionally gifted. He’s so good that he becomes a star on varsity, but things get to his head and he doesn’t think he needs the practice so he stops practicing at home. Eventually he is no longer the star of the team and he doesn’t receive any college scholarships.

2nd example:
There’s a business man in the 1940s who owns a business called “Goff Insurance” and he is really successful. He’s so successful that he grows content with his situation and stops trying to improve his company and sits on what he has. Later, a rival insurance agency beats his out and his company fails entirely

3rd example:
Alexander the Great conquerors the known world because he never grows content. His ambition causes him to constantly improve and achieve great things.

But my conclusion was weak af. one sentence. This is pretty much it:
To reiterate, when one is content, he or she may not be able to improve and may become worse off like James Curtis (basketball player), but if one doesn’t grow content, he or she can achieve great things like Alexander the Great.

With that weak ass conclusion do you guys think I could possibly score a 12 if the rest was pretty well written?