How can one convey this.....

MYOS1634
Fri, 03 Jun 2016 12:39:22 +0000

Argh… Dont mention ‘transition to adulthood’ for something like this. It is typically reserved for situations like “my siblings and I became orphans and I had to earn money and take care of everything”.
In addition, one should point out that the original intent was good - take control over weight, getting healthy - which then turned into a body building obsession many hours a day, 'road to hell paved with good intentions ’ personified, but he came back from it, hopefully finding balance in various activities. The conclusion should make clear how this balance is achieved in senior year and what it results in concretely, and how that makes the friend a good candidate for a college (in terms of character, self awareness, grit… )