How to identify child abuse

Pizzagirl
Fri, 12 Feb 2016 17:41:07 +0000

Phantombrain, there was a poster on here years ago whose name was Mifune. He had the same, overblown, cram-in-every-SAT-word-I-can approach to writing as you do. It was pretty evident that other students were making fun of him. I would urge you to write in a more concise fashion. For example, in your posting history, you referred to your mother as your “maternal parent.” Whatever for? Just say mother.

There is simply no need to use longer words when shorter ones will do. It’s not a hallmark of good writing; indeed, it’s quite the opposite.

Your paragraph could have been just as easily stated as follows:

Most child abuse isn’t directly observed, but it can have a horrific effect on a child’s life. If you think you’ve seen something that points to a child being abused, do the right thing and do something about it. If you have tips on how to do so, please post them.

None of your flowery words added any appreciable content to what I’ve said above.