Is my essay good enough?

marrerodaniel
Thu, 15 Nov 2012 09:35:48 +0000

Essay prompt: Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
-Thanks for reading my essay and giving me tips I’ve done some changes now, take a look:
I wanted to be everything, I wanted to be an actor, I wanted to be a baseball player, I wanted to be a policeman. When I was a kid I tried all sorts of sports and clubs but I felt there was something missing, as a result I quitted in everything because I didn’t felt the joy in it. My Dad was killed when I had 5 years, he was real close to me and it wasn’t easy at all to let go. It felt weird because for the rest of my life I didn’t have that male figure in my home. My mom was young at the time and I felt sometimes she didn’t even know how to be one. In school, I wasn’t going to well, I was having bad grades and my teachers were constantly calling my mom to reunions. I was mad at the world for taking the person who I loved the most. Having him absent took away my self-confidence; I felt as if I didn’t know whom I was. As the years went by my mother started to date my stepfather, I never liked him at first, but he once started to talk me about surfing and I got engaged, It was like I’ve never heard about it, it was something new, it was a challenge. I asked myself: How could I’ve never think of trying this amazing sport? As of now I love surfing and it’s my passion. It created a great relationship with my stepfather that I never had. I didn’t think surfing could teach me so much about life. Surfing connected me to nature in a way where I could appreciate everything that has been given to me and it lets me see how lucky I am to be in perfect health and in a place where I’m loved and cared for. The power of the ocean will always leave you humbled. It teaches you humility and puts things in perspective. Every night before I go to surf I get my things ready to be the first one on the beach, I can barely sleep from my anticipation of seeing the waves the next day. Its kind of an obsession and all that effort you put to wake up every morning it’s the kind of discipline you need to achieve your dreams. It’s a discipline that shows you the importance of just showing up. Surfing has taught me to live in the present no matter what tragedies you have experienced. Living by the “what if” rather than the “what is” makes your body tingle with anxiety and propels you back to the past were memories hinder your life in the present. I’ve let go of those memories now and I’ve learned from them how things happen for a reason. Life has put me through a journey I don’t regret; I appreciate every second of it and what it has to come. “Life is a journey, not a destination”-Ralph Waldo Emerson