Is my response appropriate?

frozens
Sun, 17 Aug 2014 04:30:26 +0000

Talk to your GC and see if a detention for cell phone use is even necessary to mention. If it is, I would completely scrap what you have written now. You sound way too bitter and angry, and like you haven’t seen the error of your ways. Sure, it wasn’t a huge infraction, but you still technically broke school rules. Blaming someone else for your mistake seems a bit immature. I’d use Poohbah’s explanation - short, too the point, and neutral. Good luck!