IS THIS A GOOD ESSAY? thanks

auntannie
Thu, 28 Oct 2004 17:03:06 +0000

You’ve got a good start on a good essay. Over half of the essay (268 words), though, leads up to the therapy, and I’m not sure what that part says about you, except that you had a “waddling” problem. A little under half of the essay (205 words) talks about the therapy and what that experience meant to you. I wonder if you could expand on this part a little more and cut down on the first part. What were the biggest challenges you faced in therapy? Why wasn’t it easy? What was it about your therapy that led you to develop a love of running? You might want to work on the second part first and then come back to the first part. I think you can make this into a VERY good essay.