Is this a good opening paragraph for ACT essay?

Mary123456
Tue, 06 May 2014 20:44:32 +0000

We place far too much emphasis on experience and achievement in our society. We tend to judge people based on what they’ve done rather than on what they can do. But looking only at someone’s experience and achievements ignores how that person may develop or what that person may become. We can only determine people’s true worth by what they are capable of doing, not by what they have already done.

Assignment: Should people be judged by their potential rather than by their experience and achievements? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.

@WasatchWriter‌ This is original prompt. It might make my response more clear.

For example, a person who screws up high school shouldn’t be barred from later success. If that person, perhaps in his or her 20s, decides to study hard, go to a community college, transfer to a good university, that person shouldn’t be viewed as permanently incapable of valuable work just because his/her early record is less than impressive. A silly example, perhaps, but I think that may clarify my point. Obviously, the examples I would use in the rest of the essay would clarify my meaning.