My Essay--Critique?

j10cpc5000
Sun, 07 Nov 2004 11:57:42 +0000

My English is not the greatest but here are my two cents anyways. Your essay is good because it showed that you have mastered the English language quite well for a teenager. Your essay is bad because your philosophy, that “ideas” could trick but not the way you say it, might not be recieved so well by the admission officers. Your essay lacks ideas, so you use beatiful prose to cover the void. I hope the admission officer agrees with your philosophy.

So-so overall. A bit hard to read, makes you sound like a pompous dude trying to impress instead of being real and honest. Lexicon is a bad word choice.