This is the rough draft of my intro… please comment. I didn’t look at grammar. Thank you so much!!
Dlaczego nie spisz? I faintly heard my mothers voice through my earplugs, although I knew she was yelling. The last thing on my mind was explaining why Im not sleeping. The reason for my distressthe college admissions essay. Spending my seventh consecutive night armed with a copy of 50 Successful College Admissions Essays and a never ending supply of paper, the crusade for the perfect essay left me empty-handed and discouraged. The only piece of advice I could deduce from the million-dollar college admissions book industry was Be you. Hoping that being me would come naturally, I enthusiastically grabbed my ballpoint and started to fill up blank pages. Alas, I found all the works insufficient. My writing troubles caused me let go of the preconceived notion of the perfect essay; Im going to take a risk. The numerous unforeseen alterations to my essay parallel the changes Ive faced for the past seventeen years of my life.