Need insight. Please, grade my essay.

rhshanks
Sat, 29 Dec 2012 09:03:01 +0000

Prompt: Is the world changing for the better?

Advance in technology

People became Lazy/Caused unemployment/ New industries are producing harmful chemicals- pollution-global warming/addicted

Sure, the world is becoming better for many people. This modern age has made many aspects of life such as transport, education and health easier to access and convenient. However, there are myriad negative yields because of these advancements in technology.
First and foremost, many people have lost jobs because their work has been replaced my machinery. Farmer no longer need to employ people for labor. Of course, it’s not like this would make farmers worried; this is actually an advantage for them but in the expense of thousands of people. According to the World Health Organization (WHO), 95% of farmers around the world have lost their jobs by 2004 and 80% of these people have become underemployed and unemployed since then. What does this mean? Poverty would prevail on these people and their families; this is especially the case in many countries in Africa and India. This would lead to a vast spread of uncontrollable diseases and ignorance because these people would not be able to pay for their necessity needs of food, education and health care. Who is to blame? Technology. All these assert the fact that the world is, behind the scene, exacerbating.

Secondly, the technology that has made education easier and accessible has, itself, rendered people to become indolent. Students all over the world might try to copy-paste answers to homework from online. They no longer ponder over and think of a way to improve. This laziness has caused students to play and waste time throughout high school and finally in their final exams, many fail drastically. For instance, my neighbor friend Tyler has always been fixated over Facebook. I used to wonder whether he was a genius or a fool who didn’t care much about his studies. I asked him about his performances in school and were pretty impressive. Just a month before, after Tyler had entered his final GCSE exams and was waiting for his results, he and his parents were shocked of his ‘C’ grade. He was always an A student? What happened? It’s just that he was a victim of one the cons of technology. The world is indeed not getting better as technology promises.

In short, along with the myriad pros of technology come tones of cons. I cannot stress enough exactly all the problem that technology has brought but I believe that with this rate the world is not becoming better but worse. This is all thanks to technology.