Personal Statement: ADHD, pretentiousness, self-consciousness etc.

rosymindedfuzz
Wed, 31 Jul 2013 04:20:02 +0000

Thank you Philovitist, the constructive criticism is very much appreciated. I considered the first paragraph to be its weakest part myself, but I was pretty much guaranteed a spot in the program so I just left it in. As for the rest of the essay, I completely agree with you after having reread it. I had the feeling that the essay read like I was begging for pity. I dwelled far too long on how I was held back and not how it affected me for the better. Actually, I left the latter part out completely now that I think about it. And yes, conciseness and redundancy is unquestionably a huge problem for me (I blame it on the two philosophy classes I took last semester). Fortunately, I have a few more months to revise it!