Please grade essay on questioning authority

YARAELMESSIRY
Sun, 28 Oct 2012 03:24:56 +0000

hi am from Egypt i will have the sat test just in six days i hope you help me grade my essay it is my first time to write here please grade my essay and tell me about your oppinion in my way of writting how to improve it and so :D

here it is the essay assingment

do society’s rules limit our decisions such that our choices are not freely made?

my essay

many people think that they are free to do whatever they want and nothing can effect their decisions but ,ironically, our decisions are effected by many things. first of all the situations we face in our daily life effects us , our society’s costumes and traditions effects our decision, and finally the country we live and the nature of people ruling like the that of ‘‘Hosny Mubark’’ before the Egyptian revolution effects our decisions
the situation we face in our daily life are the best example to effect our decisions. imagine a family decided to spend the summer in France ,and they have prepared the needed money to travel, but a sudden situation had happened like they are robbed and their money was gone ,so they decided to spend the summer in their country with their relatives. weather they spend the summer with their relatives or in France their situation effects their decision and make them fluctuate it
moreover, the costumes and the traditions of the country we have brought up in also effects our decisions in life. like in my country,Egypt,girls are not allowed to wear short clothes ,like short skirts , or have a boyfriends because of the costumes of the egyptian people an the religious traditions in Egypt which prevent them from doing that ; however, having a boy friend and freely wear what you want is accepted in society in other countries like Europian countries and american countries and is not forbidden. so the costumes of the country we live in and its religion may effect our decisions
Also, the rulers of the country and their policies may effect the peoples’ opinions like what people coexisted before the egyptain revolution. Before the egyptain revolution people used to be tortured . they used to have their essential rights stolen in their country like expressing their opinions , having the freedom to write whatever they want in journals. they were always prevented to understand anything, and if anyone do express his opinion he/or she will be jailed or sentenced and accused of treason ; consequently, people used to express in their journals what they have to say according to them no what in their mind because they are afraid of their torture
ultimately it is how we perceive matters that actually counts. the situations we face , the traditions of a country , the nature of our ruling people may effect our decisions and make us change it like take the ones that not in our intentions . their is no pure decision, always must be effected .