Please Grade My Essay

stanston99
Fri, 31 Jul 2015 20:14:30 +0000

Please give me an estimation of how I would score on the writing portion of the SAT. I ran out of time during my sentence, so…

Prompt:
Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?

My Essay:
The 21st century is a time full of change. Changes in medicine, technology, and the way we go about our everyday lives. Although those changes may be making our lives easier, they do not make them better. New issues arise in this technological era such as, obesity, ignorance, and unemployment.

Kids today receive gifts of IPhones, computers, and Xboxes, thus spending most of their time indoors staring at a bright, light-up screen. They don’t go outside and play catch anymore and they don’t seem to want to be active either. A study I read about asked 50 children what they like to do in their free time and 90% said play video games, 85% were over-weight. Children are eating sugary foods and because of all the new technology, they aren’t going outside to run it off, thus making adolescent obesity a problem.

With all the new gadgets out there, young adults today, no longer think for themselves. Calculators and the Internet do all that for you and as a result people are forgetting their basic addition and subtraction problems and how to look in a book to find an answer. All around me in school, my peers will spend a couple minutes reading a question and if nothing comes to their mind right away, they look on the Internet for the answer. No loner, do people spend an hour trying to finish a worksheet correctly, but instead 15 minutes form someone they found on the Internet.

Unemployment has now become an even bigger problem today due to the making of robots. With machines doing jobs at half the pace of a human, without pay; robots are now being used to perform human tasks. Although it means less stress for workers to meet a quota and more money for employers, those workers are now out of a job.

Technology offers a whole new array of possibilities, and while it may seem easier, in the…

That was where I was cut-off, please be honest and give my a score 1-6.