Please Grade my SAT Essay (Will grade back if link is posted)

dougiezmd
Mon, 20 Jan 2014 00:13:36 +0000

I would give this essay an 8 out of 10 (4/6)

The only thing I don’t like about your essay is that, in the beginning, your argument is definitely not clear. With your thesis, you seem to be leading the reader to think that unhappy people, as opposed to happy people, are the wiser ones in life. Personally, I would leave the tidbit about unhappiness out.

Your supporting evidence is already enough in demonstrating that wise people in history were not necessarily happy. You also do a nice job of tying your analysis back to the prompt.

Just clear up your intro and make your thesis more clear and I think I would have given you a 5/6.

Overall, your essay got off to a rough start, but you finished it off well.

Now grade mine >:C http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/sat-preparation/1606141-grade-my-essay-jan-25-sat-scores-8-10-usually.html