Please grade my SAT essay

shawnspencer
Thu, 29 May 2014 04:01:03 +0000

The sentence “each of us is expected to bring something new to the table lest our jobs be outsourced or mechanized, our papers be declared plagiarized and so on” makes me feel like there’s something more to be desired. I would not end your sentence that way.

The sentence “Hundreds make what’s in my purse, room tour, introduction to limits, 10 ways to make your life more productive videos, but each has it’s own idiosyncrasies.” is also kind of confusing. I suppose if they are titles of videos, they are ok, but from this if I can’t tell immediately, it reads kind of awkward. I like your line about the physics, but perhaps using titles of specific youtube channels would be confusing if someone is not familiar with it. If you are going this route, make sure you pay attention to your capitalization and punctuation. The paragraph can become confusing very easily so perhaps there are other examples you can use. (You seem to be very knowledgeable about youtube channels and videos though)