Please help and grade my essay!

keunglh
Sun, 10 Jun 2012 22:56:57 +0000

@Bannedhero I actually gave myself 35 minutes for this essay, the reason is I’m trying to practice by giving myself more time and eventually decreasing it but also trying to maintain the quality that I write with in this amount of time. Also I did write this on paper first and then transferred it onto the computer.

@Wood5440 I must say that although I was born in the USA, I almost always speak in Chinese with my family and friends and thus I believe it is evident in my writing. However to reiterate, I should be more specific and provide details. Likewise, how can I fix my pronoun reference/S-V agreement problems? Is pronoun reference, when the pronoun is referring back to an ambiguous noun?

@ratmkino Thank you for your critique, I’ll remember to do a better job with my transitions.