Please help and grade my essay!

NobodyButHector
Fri, 08 Jun 2012 20:06:39 +0000

Honestly, I read it and enjoyed it. Just two little things that I noticed PERSONALLY.

1. I wouldn’t use the word Indians, I would use Native Americans, just as a personal choice.

2. I didn’t really get the purpose of saying “these catastrophes were not from the result of an alien attack, or a meteorite crashing down”. Wouldn’t it have made more sense to say something along the lines of “These catastrophes were not the result of random occurrences, but rather a series of negligible events - and so forth.” Just me.