Please help edit Emory Transfer Short Essay

2331clk
Sat, 18 Feb 2012 11:54:16 +0000

123, I rarely comment on this type of thread, or chances threads, but, besides not dissing your current school, Mercer, I think there are so many glaring errors you might want to rewrite. That may be why people haven’t commented. I am not trying to be mean, only constructive and realistic. You have a lot of errors in grammar, and your word choice is well, not good. The essay doesn’t really tell the reader who you are. The problem is Emory is one of the country’s best schools, with kids who really know how to write, and this essay imo will stand out, and not in the way you want it to stand out. You really need to get help with this…not so much here on CC because there’s so much that needs improvement. (for instance in your very first sentence, ‘had’ , ‘of the colleges’, and ‘down’ imo should be dropped…that’s just the first sentence and doesn’t even touch the content…)