Please Help Grade my Essay

1x612nt13
Sun, 26 Dec 2010 01:34:06 +0000

Your second example seems inadequate and your comclusion needs work (and fluffing lol). My advice would be to cut down on the introduction and present your thesis as soon as possible without making it seem like you’re a robot.

I think you started off strongly, but your essay started lacking a little near the end (due to time contraints maybe?) Personally, I’d give this a 9-10 & it’s still pretty solid overall.