Please help to grade my essay

champj
Tue, 24 Feb 2015 14:15:14 +0000

Hi all,

please help me to improve on my essay. Did it in slightly more than 25 minutes. Will improve on the time taken to write an essay. I would say that the example wasn’t fully developed as I had limited time.

Do be brutally honest with my essay. Thanks!

Prompt:
“The price of greatness is responsibility.”

Winston Churchill

Assignment:
Do we expect too much from our public figures? Plan your response, and then write an essay…

Public figures are chosen by the people to serve their needs. Hence, the expectations of them are naturally high as they are expected to come up with solutions. Several examples from past events clearly demonstrate this.

On August 2011, the Singapore Parliament was dissolved by the President and an election was held. The Secretary-general of the People’s Action Party, now the current Prime Minister, Mr Lee Hisen Loong, promised a couple of things to the people, including the reduction of transportation costs.

In this particular election, the People’s Action Party gathered enough votes to got elected into Parliament and form the government. Mr Lee Hisen Loong was naturally elected as the Prime Minister. In his opening speech broadcasted on Singapore’s media channels, he advocated again the promise to reduce transport costs for the people.

The Ministry of Transport was tasked to come up with a solution for the promise. The Minister of Transport, Mr Lui Tuck Yew, came up with the solution of transport voucher to solve the problem temporarily. This is initially a good initiative. However, six months down the road, the public transport companies submitted a revision of costs to the transport council, which was under the Transport Ministry. This revision was mainly about the rising cost of public transport. It is important to note that Singapore transportations are in the form of public companies limited by shares, hence, profitability is an issue. The revision was eventually approved, rendering the transport voucher useless. This made the citizen furious and naturally resentment towards the government was at all times high.

From this example, we can see that the people’s expectations come from the promise of the public figures. If the promise is not fulfill, then it is natural that people get furious.

This brings me to the next point on the reason people get furious. When people expect, the put faith and trust in the public figures to solve a particular problem. As evidenced by the Singapore government, they made a promise that the people will be taken care of in their retirement. The Central Provident Fund, is a fund that both the employer and employee contribute to and serve as a retirement fund. Each month, the employer and employee contribute a certain percentage depending on the employee’s salaries. This has created various problems for the people. Due to the high percentage, employers are a little reluctant to hire Singaporeans.

From this example, Singaporeans count on the government to provide for them, instead, the government created more problems than solutions.

All in all, from the two examples cited above, the expectations people have are based on faith and trust in the promise made by the public figures. However, when the expectations have not been fulfilled, people get furious. Hence, it is not too overbearing to say that the expectations we have are not too much as we only expect our public figures fulfill their promise.