Please score my practice essay

Yofool
Sun, 28 Jul 2013 01:05:13 +0000

It’s funny that you mention all of those things in your first sentence, they’re all actually typos because I typed this out so fast and didn’t go back to change anything- rest assured, they are not like that in my actual paper. As for the linking “testament” and “our modern world,” I wasn’t really considering the fact that atomic weapons would be looked at as just one aspect of life, I sort of made it the face of scientific evil and since our life today is so dependent on science, I thought it fitting to say it how I did, but I do see where you’re coming from in your suggestion.

When I talk about Oedipus, I’m only referring to his pursuit of knowledge from the point when he is king, when you put it that way it is a bit out of context of what I’m saying- I don’t want you to take that offensively though, I just think you read a little too into it Anyways, I doubt technicalities like that actually matter since what the graders are doing is gauging my writing ability :)

Lastly, about your comment on length… I kind of drifted off halfway through writing my essay because it was raining outside and rain fascinates me. Obviously this doesn’t matter and excuses aren’t accepted during the SAT, I just thought I’d mention that! On the real test I’ll give myself more than enough time to actually write a little more and on the real test something as silly as rain won’t distract me from my goal (I hope!)

Thanks for your critique! I will definitely take it into mind with everything else I need when it comes time for me to write another practice essay next week.