Pointers on my entrance essays?

equineflyer
Thu, 08 Mar 2012 14:04:36 +0000

The prompt is: Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it.
I have the body but don’t know how to sum it up
When I was young, my biggest goal was to be a horse. Their beauty, spirit and speed awed and overwhelmed me. Every night I prayed, Please let me try out being a horse for a month, a week even! Needless to say, God decided that was a silly idea. Since I couldn’t be a horse, I decided that I wanted a pony of my own. In second grade I got Rosko, the most vile and evil spirited Shetland pony ever. He was a conniving devil whose philosophy was, “the grass on the other side of the fence is much greener.”
It was our whole neighborhood’s challenge to keep him inside of the fence. Our next door neighbor taught us the values of electric fencing and wooden support systems, which reduced his need the right word!. Down the road a mile or so, a family had an apple orchard, which Rosko always bee lined to. The family always had a halter ready to round him up. I was the only person that Rosko would let sneak up on him. Slowly I’d creep up behind him, slide my hand up his neck, hastily snap the halter on his head and tread on home.
The only thing that we had in common was location, but these people never hesitated to help me.