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You interact with others everywhere you go during a normal day. At stores, cashiers check you out and at school you are taught by your teacher while sitting next to your classmates, but more and more the human interactions are decreasing. Now at some stores you can check yourself out, in school you can learn more about the Civil War by using the Internet, and instead of talking to your classmates, you can just text them. Machines replaced human interaction. Although machines make life efficient and push us to discover new things, they take jobs away from humans and reduce our human interactions on a daily basis. ADD YOUR THESIS HERE

At the grocery store when you go to check out you look for the shortest line, the one that seems the most efficient. Nowadays this line is the self-check out one. You don’t have to talk to someone or hand your card over to have someone else swipe it; you can just do it yourself. The machine also doesn’t make any mistakes of scanning things twice or calculating the totals wrong; it is consistent and precise. A cashier could make these mistakes, but mistakes are part of human nature just like socializing which you lose with a machine.

Machines that are exact and efficient didn’t appear overnight; they were created by humans, through trial and error, over many years. Once humans made one machine, they continued to invent new ones improving each time. This constant push for new technology has pushed humans to be the best they can be. The more advanced the machines get, though; the fewer humans have to work to make new machines. They can just program machines to build it for them taking away the need for human labor.

When human labor is replaced by machines not only are we having more people out of jobs but we are interacting with humans less. With less human interactions, we have less requirement to be respectful or tolerant of others because you don’t have to use the social skills with a machine. The lack of having to use these social skills every day causes people to not have these skills anymore during actual human interactions.

Overall machines do improve our way of life and are the evidence of human accomplishments. Although these accomplishments are something to be proud of, we as humans have to keep in mind that the more efficient way of doing things isn’t always the best way. When you do have the time, talk to people and have a cashier check you out instead of a machine, so the machines don’t totally take the place of human labor. Most of all, though, make sure you stay aware of the common courtesies that you should have so when you do interact with other people even if you don’t have to use those social skills with machines.