Rate my college essay??

katherne1995
Tue, 23 Jul 2013 19:22:06 +0000

Also tell me what I can improve on and edit, in terms of grammar too. This is for this fall.
Question: Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.

Surrounded by powdery chalkboards, deteriorating textbooks, specks of eraser shavings on desks, and a handful of students puzzled by math problems, my eyes gazed at a student sitting besides me, who was striving desperately for help. As I turned my head towards her paper, I caught a glimpse of her perplexed face and wondered which part of the problem she was struggling on. I slid my seat over, took a peek at her paper, and asked her if I could assist her in solving the math problem. She seemed to hesitate, but agreed. After only a few seconds of explanation, her face lit up and she gave an immense grin. The one feeling I love the most is when I sense someone having that ‘light-bulb’ moment, where they figure out how to complete a math problem and exclaim, “Oh, I get it now!”. The best feeling in the world is knowing that you impacted someone’s life by teaching them something new or aiding them in achieving a challenge.

I congratulated her on understanding how to solve the problem and assured her that math always gets easier with practice. Shortly afterwards, my teacher proceeded towards me as she overheard my teaching. Wise, educated, and filled with a kind heart, my wonderful teacher, Mrs. Archer, had informed me, “You would become a great math teacher one day! But trust me, you don’t want to be one, it doesn’t pay well”.

Looking back and realizing I was only in sixth grade at the time of this occurrence, I believed that there was no way I would ever have an interest in becoming a math teacher and would rather have a career with good pay. Mrs. Archer related her opinion about how teaching might not pay well, and considering my parents were never wealthy, I always thought finding a career with a high earning income would suit me best in accomplishing everything I always dreamed of. Yet today, a paycheck doesn’t stop me from pursuing my talent in mathematics and from doing what I love most.

Whether excelling at math is inheritable due to my prolonged, past string of family members being math teachers, or is a subject where practice makes perfect, math is part of my identity. My consistent practice in homework and eagerness to learn new math concepts has always been something important that I enjoy doing, as well as my passion in making a positive influence in someone’s life by teaching them something new. Why waste such a mathematical talent by choosing a different career when you can help spread it by teaching it to others who are struggling to learn? Teaching is the foundation and in my opinion, the most important career in the world, because without it, all other jobs would be impossible.