Rate my essay please?

satman1111
Wed, 17 Apr 2013 23:40:08 +0000

Hey,
I’d give your essay a 9 as well (coming from a person who got a 12 on the essay and an 800 in writing)

Good things:
-good hook
-good 3 examples
-length is good
-variety of examples
-word choice

Things to improve:
-thesis could be stronger
-at the end of each supporting paragraph, make sure to relate how the example proves your thesis
-stronger closing

My advice:
-come up with examples that could be molded into anything beforehand, as to minimize planning time so you can finish with a good conclusion and read over your essay
-write as much as you possibly can, to the last line if possible