Rate My Essay?

xxlianaxx
Fri, 02 Oct 2015 08:30:14 +0000

So I did a practice test the other day and I need someone to score/rate it for me. Keep in mind that I’ve only started prepping for my SAT a month ago

The topic was: is acquired knowledge more valuable than taking actions?

Here’s my essay:

Talking and doing are two completely different things. Many people talk about what they know, but few only ever take action. Taking action to make a change, no matter how small that change would be, is what actually matters most, and is more valuable than merely acquiring knowledge.
Taking action can help our society in developing and evolving. Thomas Edison tried to make a light bulb work properly, and he tried 700 times until he eventually figured out how to make it work.Although he didn’t acquire knowledge on how to make that light bulb work at first, taking action was what mattered most. Sometimes taking action can help us acquire knowledge as well.
Moreover, taking action can make our society stronger and more united. Katniss Everdeen, from the book The Hunger Games, stood up for herself, her sister, and her country by taking action against her country’s corrupt and unfair government. Everyone knew how corrupt the government was, but only Katniss chose to stand up against it. That action spread unity between the people of her country and they all joined forces and became one hand against the government. Sometimes our knowledge needs to change into actions in order to be valuable.
Finally, taking action is the key to making our knowledge valuable. Taking actions, big or small, is one of the best ways to make our society developed and evolved, stronger, and more united. Let’s all take actions and stand up for our beliefs to make a change in the world.

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