Read My Supplement Essay Please!

ArKhAiK
Tue, 31 Jan 2012 15:43:19 +0000

Terrible. No specifics about why Michigan, it’s very choppy, and it seems as if it took you 15 minutes to write. Step back and really assess WHY do you want to go to Michigan. From your last paragraph, it sounds as if you could go to any college really because entreprenuership and CS isn’t unique to UM, and you don’t say why you want to study it.

Rewrite it or you’ll just be wasting money on the application fee.