Read my UC prompt 1 response

piggy22
Sat, 30 Nov 2013 00:21:27 +0000

Please help! looking for someone to be brutally honest in reading what I sooo far for my essay prompt #1 also. Im not getting to the point and feel like it’s getting worse by the minute. :/

My world is within my mind; my castle and protection. Within those walls is where I reside, a place that cannot ever be taken from me. This is where my ambition, dreams, drive, personality, compassion, and knowledge have been nurtured and cradled; molding the person I have become. My environment is one of peace, solitude, confinement, and secrecy, though at any point can be pillaged by outsiders. Once the walls of the castle have been breached it is an atmosphere of solidarity, ingenuity, and variation. The saying, “you are shaped by your surroundings” is ever accurate but not exact. My world can only be shaped through the ideology of what is permitted through the knights at the gate. I am the Queen of my castle and allow only those of valiant measure entrance beyond the perimeter. Every Queen entertains the voice of the people, however only those ideas that are worthy and distinct are applied to the law of the land. It is the objective of the sovereign to develop a community of excellence and everlasting influence and within the castle’s walls is where I contemplate a strategy for prosperity.

I have tactically shaped my mind to allow only the absolute best to stem from my innate actions. What I have allowed to absorb within my mind is purely positivity and determination to strive for all things greater than my surroundings. I have progrmmed myself to recognize that all things are possible with the faith and self-encouragement to undertake the seemingly impossible, there is a reoccurring proof by those before me that have overcome the odds and fought tooth and nail for their achievements. By embracing all creeds and perspectives I am opening my horizons to far greater possibilities. I am constructing the best me by pick and choosing the greatness in all circumstances and incorporating them into all endeavors.

I am inspired to take my dream of becoming a self-made entrepreneur to greater lengths and using my abilities to inspire and facilitate for others. I identify the significance in my future success and my ability to apply this to service others, as their ideas and actions have helped teach and guide the shaping of myself.