SAT December 2014 Essay (Please give me some feedbacks)

Dawn001
Thu, 06 Aug 2015 11:40:32 +0000

Hi, every body please grade my essay out of 12 and give me some advices. I am preparing for November SAT.
Prompt 1 :

Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.

In decision making, we usually follow a reasoned process: weighing pros and cons, talking things over with a friend, and drawing on our past actions and experiences. In snap judgments—decisions that we make on the spot, with no reflection beforehand—we do not follow such a methodical decision-making process. Everything tells us that relying on snap judgments is unwise. We make such decisions, however, because they ultimately work out better than decisions to which we give a lot of thought.

Assignment: Are snap judgments better than decisions to which people give a lot of thought? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations

Essay :

In dictionaries, judgement is defined as the act of taking a position from an issue or a dilemma with wisdom, wit and calm-analysis. As far as I am concerned, I do believe that quick and rapid decisions are by no mean an effective ways to solve a problem, people should make a deep reflection in order to get an accurate decision.

Blunders in policymaking abound but giving such a vital historical decision thoughtlessly and with no careful analysis to reality is not only impetuous but also catastrophic. Following 1947 UN’s Partition Plan for Palestine (53% for Jews and 46% for Arabs), Arab authorities unified yet snap judgement to the status quo was to directly start the war. Dramatically, Arabs lost the war , lost more land and suffered for years due to the collapse of the economy. Additionally, the Middle East turned into a high-tension zone , the status of no-war and no peace served to widen the gap between the two people and nations strove continuously from the woes of successive wars in 1948, 1967,1953,1973 and 2000s. If Arab rulers at that time thought of a wise judgement to set-up the conflict from the beginning and started a long-term negotiations with their counterpart and gave a lot of thought to their decision, The Middle East would probably be stable, harmonic and tolerant. Ultimately, snap judgement were not only disastrous moment but haunted future generations as well, for a long time.

Similarly, The Metamorphosis by Franz Kafka also illustrate this theme. In fact, Gregor’s improvident decision to leave his room has led to his demise. Previously in the novella, Gregor transformed into a vermin insect. He became to have trouble with eating. His behavior changed and his human side fade away progressively. Therefore, he transformed into an actual beast. One day, he felt annoyed and decided to visit his sister in order to listen to her play. He went to her directly without thinking what a reaction she could have. Shocked by his appearance, his mother fainted and his sister was horrified. Finally, his family found that Gregor’s presence is too much to bear and so they must get rid of him. Tragically, Gregor passed away silently. Had he restrained him self and thought about the consequence, he would probably had a better fate.

A thoughtful analysis of Arab-Israeli conflict origin and of Kafka’s novella proved that it’s vital to weight our decisions and to be long-sighted. Snap decisions are rather a tantamount to failure, chaos and destruction.