SAT Essay from Collegeboard

CC_Admin
Fri, 06 May 2005 16:56:00 +0000

How funny that you used the Crucible, I couldn’t think of a literature example at the moment but as soon as I got done I was like damn I should have used The Crucible. Anyway, all in all I think it’s a good essay, although the conclusion is a little weak (I’m guessing you ran a little short on time?), “Let’s face it” seems a little too casual and, similarly, rather than “what you personally believe” would sound quite a bit more formal by simply rewording it to something like “one’s personal beliefs” Other than that, the body was good except you seem to have gotten just a teeny bit off topic by focusing more on why these characters should be admired rather than why the majority was wrong, but that’s a pretty minor thing I think. The introduction was very strong. Anyway, that’s just my humble opinion, good luck tomorrow, I’m sure you’ll do well!