SAT essay: Grade mine? plz?

pacers7ind
Sun, 22 Nov 2009 22:39:40 +0000

May someone give me a grade for my SAT essay (2-12).
I would greatly appreciate it.
I wrote this essay in 20 minutes.
I recieved a score of 9 on the October SAT and im studying for December
The prompt was
“Can daily actions of average people have a significant impact on the course of history?”

Daily actions of average people greatly contribute to course of history. This is widely demonstrated in he cause of global warming. also, what each person decides to do such as read a book can ignite a wave of controversy as demonstrated by Uncle toms Cabin.

Global warming was caused by the daily actions of the average person. although each persons actions are insignificant, when they all add up, it turns into a large amount. The average person uses drives twelve miles a day, but when days turn int years, the carbon dioxide amounts significantly increase. thus going into the atmosphere and cause global warming.
The issues of recycling proves that every action shapes history. due to the lack of recycling, the amount of waste is growing. This will cause law makers to implement policies that promote recycling. these policies might be implemented at the cost of other programs in order to save money. Money might be shifted from national defense to recycling. Thus making the country vulnerable to attacks.

The daily actions of people such as reading a book can shape history. The book uncle Toms cabin was widely read and it ignited an opposition toward slavery. Lincoln had even blamed the author for the cause of the war. But if it wants for the war, the United states would have never turned into the industrial giant during he early 1900’s.