SAT November 2013 Essay

NextNexus
Thu, 06 Aug 2015 21:29:23 +0000

As MITer94 said, your examples are great and your analysis is thorough. However, I think you could have improved the introductory paragraph, mostly in grammar and not in logic. You switched between “person” and “people,” making it less parallel and a bit choppy.

Also, you refer to a gender-neutral noun “person” as a “he,” which is incorrect. “He or she,” on the other hand, is a correct pronoun replacement for “person.” I would recommend using “people” instead of “person” because you can then just refer to “people” as “they,” instead of “person” as “he or she.”

Just my two cents. Overall great essay, definitely within the 10-12 range.