Score my SAT essay please :)

Americandream34
Sat, 28 Dec 2013 10:23:14 +0000

An indisputable reality of life is that responsiblity to improve our community is, indeed, essential. In final analysis, responsible action, motivated to improve our society, is the spark that will ignite the engines of modern society.

The reason why my second paragraph sounds odd and doesn’t fit the question is because this is my universal template. I memorize most of it and change the story so that it ‘answers’ the question. Should I change the subject of paragraph 2? I think it would be better to make it general like the first example. Any ideas?