Short Story- rate please?

Effulgent
Fri, 26 Nov 2004 15:55:52 +0000

Well, see, I did the whole thing with different ways or referring to the mother and father for a reason too. It was supposed to show his attitude towards their actions… like when he felt like a child, he referred to her as mama. When he felt she was distant, he called her mother.

So I guess that bit’s not working?