Show not Tell?

pinkpokadot07
Sun, 21 Oct 2012 09:55:26 +0000

I’ve written my college essay and many people have said that it is great, but as my essay goes on, I start to tell more than show. I was wondering if anyone could help me SHOW more in the last 2 paragraphs of my essay. The topic is rather unique.

Please help if you know how I can do this!