Social Media- Followers

milee30
Sat, 22 Dec 2018 14:05:19 +0000

"Her half sister (who’s 20 years older) was going deaf and my daughter was fearful that her half-sister wouldn’t be able to communicate with the family, etc. So my daughter immersed herself in Sign Language, started a club at school, started signing at her school masses, and even did a documentary about Sign Language which has been entered into many competitions. "

This would be the main focus of a compelling essay. The social media parts - making the videos and # of followers - would be worth a brief (one sentence) mention to illustrate the lengths she’s gone to in her pursuit of this goal, but IMO aren’t a compelling main story.

I wouldn’t go into any of the parts about sign language forcing people to put down phones and communicate. It’s not a relevant part of your daughter’s story and potentially distracts from the essay.