Soo, here's my essay...comments please:)

anglswings
Wed, 11 Oct 2006 22:18:23 +0000

i think your major lines in the story are great. if thoseare your passions, then go with them, just try and show it differently. Doesnt have to be narrative or a certain “type of writing” but we able to show that its your passion without bluntly saying it. Also, try and avoid metnioning the school in name at all times in your essay. they state that many timse i their tips, leave that to the extra notes section. Just be yourself, it is possible. Just the next time your doing something that you consider your passio, try and look at it from all different angles, try and look deeper than the obvious and just think constantly “How can i put THIS into words on a paper?” Im praying for you, really. I hate personal essay and anything that has to do with “looking inside myself”, haha. good luck on everything and hopefully they’ll like both of our essays.