Soo, here's my essay...comments please:)

Kr123
Mon, 09 Oct 2006 11:10:47 +0000

I am struggling with this a bit as I want to be helpful and not critical. I would consider focusing on one of the two as your passion and maybe how the one might enhance the other. You want to let ND know why/how you are a good fit for them and they are a good fit for you. Have you English teacher review the grammar. Your opening statement said your passions drove you to aply to ND I could get it in the music section but not in the NASA section. I hope I have helped with my response not frustrating you . Good luck in your writing