Soo, here's my essay...comments please:)

spiderman-reborn
Mon, 09 Oct 2006 23:26:34 +0000

First 2 sentences should be deleted immediately. How many other people do you see saying- “well, i have many interests, but…” Um yeah ok, i watch tv, surf web, play football every now and then, listen to ipod, go fishing once in blue moon, member of chess and rainbow club… yeah everybody is involved in random shlt obviously u got to pick the most important 1 (or maybe 2 if you make it good). Everybody is gonna be kissin ND @ss too, you prob. gonna end up doin it, but try to make it sound as sincere as possible.

This is how you write an interesting paper. 1. emotion- imagine someone just walked up to your chair, turned around, farted, snorted to himself, then walked away- how *ed would you be? Now try to make reader feel how *ed you were. Note dont say: i was angry… Number 2: dont say IIIIII, I did this, i felt this, I love u irish, I lika da foosball… It gets boring and dry try to mix it up. now go