Soo, here's my essay...comments please:)

rohan2k6
Wed, 11 Oct 2006 15:15:10 +0000

eh, I like some of your ideas, but I’m not gonna lie…a lot of the material is really cliche. At a selective school like ND, where a lot of really bright and talented students like you will be applying, you’re gonna find that a lot of people will probably have written similar essays…“my passion is…music.” Think about all the people that will be applying who want to be in the Notre Dame Band! You’re going to have to stand out above all of them…so try to model the runner’s essay (included in a different thread)…she really did an excellent job of portraying her passion but did it in a really creative and enjoyable manner…I’m sure you can do the same. Good Luck :)