Terrible U Penn Essay please read!

Steener32
Fri, 24 Dec 2010 00:24:08 +0000

I feel it lacks cohesion/voice. Any input would be greatly appreciated.

Prompt: Considering both the specific undergraduate school or program to which you are applying and the broader University of Pennsylvania community, what academic, research, and/or extracurricular paths do you see yourself exploring at Penn?

If it was up to me, I would never go to sleep. Unfortunately, no amount of caffeine I drink can counter my biological necessities and, as a result, I strive to fill every waking moment with a meaningful experience before succumbing to that inconvenient nightly hiatus.
It seems fitting that my college search has led me to the University of Pennsylvania, a school bursting with life and energy every waking moment. It’s enthusiastic student body and proximity to the city will always be a source of inspiration.
At the moment, I plan to major in the university’s nationally recognized international relations program. In addition, learning languages is a passion of mine, and I plan on continuing my study of French at U Penn while hopefully beginning a few more. This ambition will include spending a summer in the French immersion program offered in Tours, France.
It is difficult to say what extracurricular paths I take at U Penn. For now, I plan on continuing my participation with student activism by joining the university’s Amnesty International club. I will certainly continue with Model United Nations, a club I was fortunate to discover this year. In addition, I couldn’t imagine not joining U Penn’s student paper, The Daily Pennsylvanian, as I feel journalism offers the best window into a community. Reconnecting with nature is also an important part of my life and I anticipate taking part in the university’s Outdoor Adventure programs, giving me a break from crazy city life. However, I’m willing to take my chances with new clubs and organization at the University of Pennsylvania; I’m sure not matter where I end up, I will be surrounded by inspiring and motivated peers.