UC Personal Statement (Both Prompts)

bomerr
Sun, 03 Nov 2013 23:29:41 +0000

Okay on prompt one you talk way to much about your mother and moving to America. This is a personal story about you and what you have done, not your parents. Being poor and having a missing father sucks… but a lot of people will also have that story. You have to express how it uniquely affected YOU directly. Or you can focus more on the part about becoming an engineer.

Your second prompt is a lot better. I’d focus and direct it more to a certain event.

I’d talk more about coming from the phil. and skipping a grade in the 1st prompt. Troubles with adjusting to the culture or vice-versa, etc.