UC Prompt 2, help critique please please!

cathereeene
Sat, 05 Nov 2011 22:16:04 +0000

Thank you thank you thank you! Loved the edits!

But also, does my essay answer the prompt? The prompt being: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
Does my essay not only tell, but show? Is it unique? Do you think I should keep it or try a new topic?