UC transfer personal statement - post, critiques, advice, etc.

Tik1127
Thu, 05 Jun 2014 08:38:33 +0000

I read this a couple nights ago, just read a bit of again. I see you are trying to write the perfect paper. But it honestly looks forced. It appears to be a story rather than your own statement. It needs to be a free-flowing essay that is easy to read. Some of your lingo, it does seem you are on thesaurus.com and looking for the perfect word. This isn’t really a research paper, so, just start over, and write and write. Write from the heart, do not look for the perfect word that you believe will win over the reader. These people are pros and see thousands papers a year.