UCF Admissions Essay Review?

neutron031
Fri, 06 Sep 2013 17:10:29 +0000

“I feel that because of what I learned, I can give so much to the UCF community. With my passion and will to succeed, the University of Central Florida can be put on the map for a groundbreaking research facility.”

Comes across a little pompous. It’s like you’re saying “I’m so great, I can single-handedly take this school out of the dumps and put it on top.”

All around, it’s a great essay. I love the way you tied the two questions together. I’m also applying to UCF, and I hope mine turns out half as well as yours did. Haha. Good luck!