UCLA transfer 2014: Chance me?

Snorlaz
Tue, 22 Oct 2013 18:40:24 +0000

@iDizzle, I just want to make sure OP knows there will be plenty of “well-rounded” students applying. Simply mentioning overcoming obstacles doesn’t equate to “it will definitely help.” You still have to write well etc etc etc. It makes for an interesting topic, but, OP still needs to execute. That’s all I’m pointing out.

@OP, “the adcoms can not assume that I had life easily because I was a competitive tennis player…”
Just like the adcomms cannot assume you’re a special snowflake who has “been through things most people will never have to go through in their lifetime” based on a couple of personal statements.

“It is not even my point to have the adcomms pity me, but to understand that under extensive circumstances I have not let it affect my academic work.”

“The event was a tragedy, but I made sure to keep my focus on how it has given me certain personality characteristics (such as strength, courage, and resilience). I will also play around with lighter topics but I feel that writing about this (which was not easy) will produce the most powerful and moving essay possible.”

"So I feel that writing about the adversities I have experienced should help my chances. "

So, you feel as though these experiences should help your chances. Why? Because you’re going to “move” them with a “powerful” topic? I never called it pity. That’s what you said. I think it is clear, however, that you are attempting to evoke some sort of response to your life story. That’s fine. I even think this CAN make for a great topic. Again, just be careful how you phrase things. You have no idea who will read over your essay and if you come off as a special snowflake, you might actually do yourself a disservice. Best of luck to you.