UPenn Essay Jerome Fisher Program

YeahImThatGuy
Wed, 04 Jan 2012 15:12:29 +0000

Firstly, you shouldn’t be posting essays publicly.
Now that you’ve gone ahead and done it already, I’ll tell you what I thought of it. The essay is too verbose and personally, the biggest downside is that it lacks a soul. It doesn’t tell me as much about you as it should and focuses on the ‘side dishes’ too much. If you are willing to fix that, you’re almost there. Also, cut down on the length a bit. It’s a bit draggy right now. If I were you, I’d try and make it flow more. A lot more. Lastly, it’s not Penn University, it’s either ‘Penn’ or ‘University of Pennsylvania’. You really don’t want to get the name wrong.

I disagree with USApplicant. Even if you ask for aid, you can get in, though you’re chances are severely reduced.

FYI, I was accepted to Jerome Fisher last year with aid. :)