want some feed back for my uc personal statement:]

Mystify
Fri, 12 Oct 2012 21:02:34 +0000

731 words is a lot! you should definitely cut it down a little to leave space for the other personal statement.
please make sure that you work on the subject-verb agreements in your essay.

i.e. During “Yum Cha”, each family member start chit-chatting automatically, they get to promote their relationship, fulfill some conversation they may not do it daily

in this case the first subject is each family member, and each family member is singular so the verb “start” should actually be “starts”.