Would you check out my essay please?

hilsa
Sun, 11 Jan 2009 22:58:56 +0000

Yes, that’s the only somewhat major problem. You’re just listing stuff you did, stuff you want to do, and stuff you want to be. It lacks depth. If you would have just focused on one EC, one goal, and one career aspiration, it would be been a bit better.

Don’t think I have amazing intelligence in literature or something, though. But my AP Lang teacher last year drilled into us that quality is better than quantity, as cliche as that sounds.