Would you check out my essay please?

VandyPrayer
Sun, 11 Jan 2009 23:00:01 +0000

My essay was about Spongebob and sexual therapy. I understand passionate, but you could have been passionate by thinking of some abstract booty-stuff and had a passionate drive in creating an abstact essay.

You should still at least try writing another essay for colleges with deadlines on the fifteenth about cursing someone out in an FBLA competition–seriously, you could have written on your mom in great detail about the nursing home and noting a woman “who took off her shirt and ran rampantly around the room with her boobs swinging wildly.”

Your essay can be fabricated. I suggest re-writing it for places like Wake Forest and WashU and add in humor and other stuff and keep the thing about you wanting to be everything your mother couldn’t.

I’m not suggesting you won’t get into Vanderbilt, because I am praying for you and everyone on here to attend. I’m just wanting you to write a better essay! You know? Trying to be a big brother.