Would you please grade my essay

Aodh
Thu, 08 Mar 2007 16:45:13 +0000

I kinda BSed my way through some of it, so some might not be true/accurate.

"Technology promoises to make our lives easier, freeing up time for leisure pursuits. But the rapid pace of technological innovation and the split second processing capabilities of computers that can work virtually nonstop have made all of us feel rush ed. We have adaopted the relentless pace of the very machines that were supposed to simplify our lives, with the result that, wh ether at work or play, people do not feel like their lives have changed for the better.

-Adapted from Karen Finucan, “Life in the Fast Lane”

Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?"



From the birth of Jesus Christ to the death of Pope John Paul, man has always been searching for ways to make life easier. Whether it was the first soup bowl or the first super-computer, mans urge to make life easier has always been great. These changes have always been made for positive reasons, but unfortunately things do not always work out that way. Although both the industrial Revolution as well as the calculator have had many positive affects on the world as it is today, their very significant negative affects cannot be ignored.
The Industrial Revolution, or the era of change, was a period of history frequently associated with the invention of the steam engine. The steam engine made life much easier, not just for people at that time but also people now. The steam engine was used in trains and factories, which both need workers to operate the machinery. As hundreds of factories opened up, so did thousands of jobs. Many workers were happy to have jobs at first, but then realized that they were worse off then they had been before. Deplorable condition and next-to-nothing pay was not uncommon for a factory worker. It that wasn?t enough it was also quite common to have a boss that would treat workers more like dogs then humans. Their lives may have been easier with this new machinery, but it was by no means better.
?No calculators, use your brains!?, a common line that I have heard repeatedly from every math teacher that I have encountered. The calculator is quickly becoming one of the most essential items for a high school student, or even an adult. After I had become so dependent on this magical device, it was not easy to rid myself of the habit. If I had ever been to lazy to do a problem, the solution was easy; use a calculator. If I did not know the answer- - use a calculator. I finally had to ask myself ?What if I cannot use a calculator? Then what will I do?? I grew very nervous over the thought of not being able to use my precious calculator, but then I realized that I had become dependent on it, just as a smoker is addicted to cigarettes. This device that allows us to do long division in seconds, or find out exactly how much a 13% tip is has caused us to become so lazy that we can?t take an extra 20 seconds to do out an equation on paper. Our brains need to stay active so you might as well lose the calculator and use your brain instead.
Changes, no matter how big or small, are an important part of our world. Although many changes can have a great deal of positives associated with them, we cannot let ourselves forget that it might not be as great as we think it is.


Thanks for grading it. Any advice is great, because I am not the best at essays (or getting started at least)